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May 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really really like the second world! You should do it. World #7 is good too.
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May 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ah! Some clear up...Nice...I didn't read the other stuff...heh heh...I want to be surprise :-D ^_~ Anyhoo, nice interlude....Until next time!
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May 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I just wanted to say, I love this story. I have read every chapter since the begining and am always checking back every day to see if you have posted a new one. I've also read some of your other stories, all of which are extremly good. A very talented writer I must.
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Anyway, I would also like to leave a comment about the complaining about too much talking in the 'Giligan's Island' chapters. I for one love your story how you write it. Now while keeping your readers pleased. I do not think that you should change how you write because of them. Please, continue to write your way, your style. It is great how it is. No offence to the other reviewers out there who did not like it, but every story has slow parts. And those slow parts of the story help it progress no matter how slow it
Gomen, I just felt that I should put in my opinion on that. I do love your story how it is, and see no reason to change anything you have done. Or will do in the future. Thanks for sharing such wonderful stories with us, the readers and fellow authors. And I look forward to your next chapters and stories.
Lady Sethia
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Anyway, I would also like to leave a comment about the complaining about too much talking in the 'Giligan's Island' chapters. I for one love your story how you write it. Now while keeping your readers pleased. I do not think that you should change how you write because of them. Please, continue to write your way, your style. It is great how it is. No offence to the other reviewers out there who did not like it, but every story has slow parts. And those slow parts of the story help it progress no matter how slow it
Gomen, I just felt that I should put in my opinion on that. I do love your story how it is, and see no reason to change anything you have done. Or will do in the future. Thanks for sharing such wonderful stories with us, the readers and fellow authors. And I look forward to your next chapters and stories.
Lady Sethia
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May 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
* trips and falls over real life * Damn real life always gettingin the way! ^_~ A bit disappointing, but I liked it anyways...* sighs * Its too bad you couldn't make this longer...it would have been really interesting...But like you said real life intrudes and you must live with it...But...there IS always the next chapter! ^_^ Until next time then!
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May 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
what the hell?!!! people didn't like the talking in gilligans island? well let me tell you something i like everything you put in your story... the talking, the fighting, the thinking, etc. EVERYTHING... ALL OF IT! but it doesn't matter if you want to do the story line faster or slower, i love your story so keep it up! bye
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May 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
well jeff, that was interresting. Was short. But interesting all the same :D
cant wait for chapter 57
cant wait for chapter 57
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May 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
noooo... dont speed up the story line...noooooooo
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May 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the update THe Star Wars chapters were good if not a bit short, but still good. I hope you still add some character developement and I was hoping for some more detail,but your the author so keep up the good work.
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May 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I noticed your question about the drop in reviews. I don't know about anybody else, but my non-responsiveness has not been about the sexual tension. It's about the setting. Gilligan's Island just seems wrong. I've been skimming the last few chapters and reading what I caught as important parts and waiting for the next world to come up. Now that I see it's Star Wars I will be more into it.
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May 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay the best thing any reviewer could do for you was to mention the need for you to actually proofread your work before posting. Spellcheckers are a nice gimmick but they cannot catch all of a writer's mistakes such as when a word is spelled correctly but not intended, and at times even suggest the wrong word due to the word being 'butcherred' while trying to 'sound it out'.
You definitely cannot afford to rest on a spellcheck alone if your past chaptere are anything to go by. Many a time the story has has become broken by typos that spellchecker didn't see as being wrong, such as in your latest of chapter Star Wars 1 wherein you have 'talk tree' instead of the intended 'tall tree'.
You also have a second problem that occurs often which is the verb tense issue. At times it skips from present to past tense even within the same sentence much less the same paragraph which is not acceptable either by most literary experts.
Story complaints aside I rather like reading this piece you've created for the most part, although these 'worlds' you're sticking them into almost seems more like a gimmicky way of adding crossovers than it does a realistic dimension travelling experience. I also had problems with the vampire world plot and the whole Gilligan's Island adventure but those problems at least were a personal problem rather than potentially widespread one.
One final thing.. in regards to your author notes on Sesshomarou and radio waves.. Radio waves are not light. Repeat those words until that mistaken notion you had is forgotten. This should have nevern enn enterred into your head with a bit of math. The rate at which a light beam particle can move in a second is over 186k miles. Now it is only 800 miles from Tennessee to south Florida and yet they can't even receive radio waves originating from each other. Hell someone in north Florida can't even receive from south Florida without bouncing it off of a bunch of relay stations. Admittedly radio waves are somewhat related to light but no more related are they (and in fact less) than they are to sound.
You definitely cannot afford to rest on a spellcheck alone if your past chaptere are anything to go by. Many a time the story has has become broken by typos that spellchecker didn't see as being wrong, such as in your latest of chapter Star Wars 1 wherein you have 'talk tree' instead of the intended 'tall tree'.
You also have a second problem that occurs often which is the verb tense issue. At times it skips from present to past tense even within the same sentence much less the same paragraph which is not acceptable either by most literary experts.
Story complaints aside I rather like reading this piece you've created for the most part, although these 'worlds' you're sticking them into almost seems more like a gimmicky way of adding crossovers than it does a realistic dimension travelling experience. I also had problems with the vampire world plot and the whole Gilligan's Island adventure but those problems at least were a personal problem rather than potentially widespread one.
One final thing.. in regards to your author notes on Sesshomarou and radio waves.. Radio waves are not light. Repeat those words until that mistaken notion you had is forgotten. This should have nevern enn enterred into your head with a bit of math. The rate at which a light beam particle can move in a second is over 186k miles. Now it is only 800 miles from Tennessee to south Florida and yet they can't even receive radio waves originating from each other. Hell someone in north Florida can't even receive from south Florida without bouncing it off of a bunch of relay stations. Admittedly radio waves are somewhat related to light but no more related are they (and in fact less) than they are to sound.