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Hey Jeff! Thankyou for the rundown of WWII at the end of the latest chaptI faI failed history miserably in high school. (Why study history when there are books to be read? hehe. I only learned where Pearl Harbor is because my old man had some quiz and made fun of me so bad cuz I thought it was on the other side of America, hehe In my defence we went from talking about the Boston Tea Party to Pearl Harbor, so I assumed it was near Boston, lmao)
As always I love your writing, I do have some nervousness over the situation that Kagome and Sess find themselves in, but at least they have that they are Japanese going for them.

This story is spectacular. I hope to read more soon.

xoxo Cordi

that's different... I saw only few authors who actually went down the paths you choose and it worked, and I really like it so far. Now, I hope you aren't going to cliche about the "What If the germans won WWII" or the war itself, because I (as german) think that it has to be treated carefully, and that even although this is story is fictional (don't get me wrong here I hate the part of my countrie's history like anybody else, but my family lost several members through all this shit and I really get bitchy sometimes about all this, especially if treated wrong) I hope you write with respect for those who died and don't really make it cliche... so please, keep up your work on the same high level as you did till now, I am curious to read on with the next update... Perhaps you even could send me a direct anser what you think of my review for this via mail..

I love your story really, and I am with it from the start like I did with the most of your other stories.. keep up the good work

NOOOOOOO!!!!!! Don't do anything bad to them!was was all going... so well! Nonononononononononono! oh- and fluffy rocks so if you choose the fucking mutt over that sexy beast you can die! *eh-hem.* but i love the story! Very good, you have my deepest compliments!
*Sess/Kag is de best! whoo hoo!*

man oh man... i wanna see sess beat the shit out of some nazi's... jeff my freind you had better let sess get a hold of a sub machine gun or something i wanna see him som some of those fuckers down :) anyways, very good chapter! i feel sorry for sess cause he cant do shit.. but hey now he knows how kagome and inuyasha feel :P

latetz... cant wait till thursday... hopefully the update is long

love your story please update soon

Sesshoumaru is a dog demon.. but he isn't a dog. In fact Inuyasha gets rather offended if he's referred to a dog in any shape or form. Still it's your story and you may do as you please. However your verb tenses are driving me insane! Here are a few pointers please take them as they are meant to be contive ive critizim(sp) and pointers. I'm not claiming to be the prefect or even a decent writer, just someone that wants to help. (^_^) The words in () are what I think is proper. Again you don't have to listen to a word I'm saying. I will not be offended.


Kagome (wore) wearing a plain white robe ) (i) (it sounds like the sword is attached to the robe) a sword strapped
to her side.

She (took) takes a deep breath, as if from shock. She (thought) thinks in a
panic, ‘there is no magic in this world . . . ’


Also you shouldn't tell your readers what they do you should show them via description and dialouge. Instead of writing.. "They talk...." and leaving it that tells us in dialouge, description etc what they spoke about. Or in the instance of "He leaves.." How did he get there? Did he run? skip? What did he think about if anything along the way? What did Kagome do in his absence? I had some other things I wanted to mention, but for the moment I can't think of them. *shakes head mumbling about old age*

Wow! was was hot as hell!
I'm really curious to see what would become of a magical being in a world devoid of magic... I mean, Inuyasha has a human body to revert to and is so used to it's weakness that he can actually fight in it but what is Sesshoumaru? His true form is a giant dog so shouldn't he revert to it? And if there is no magic, how will they leave! hell! how could they come in the first place... I'm eager to see your point of view on those subjet as every aspects you put in your stories are always perfectly tht oft of.
And still, all my hentai mind can think of (especially after last chapter!) is "yes! no magic so if Sesshou can actually remain in his humanoid form and regain some strength, Kagome's birth control implant should work".... yes, I know, I'm hopeless. I'm so not reading this when my son is around!
Take your time and keep up such good art! (I admit I'm checking everiday both this story and "a shard in kyoto" in hope of an update...despite your announced schedule. That's it, I'm addicted!)

Sorry long time no R&R
I am finally caught up now!
I love each world you have taken them to and each experiencey hey have had to endure.
I can’t help but chuckle at the thought that jeffs is the god that has set Kagome on this path
to help her grow stronger.

And yes *blushes* I had to change my painties. :P

-looking around and sees no one- Good chap. Your goal was accomplished with me.