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hurry up what will kagomes respnse be

jeff...your cliffhangers are starting to piss me off! You always leave off on a very interesting part dammit! *head starts to go red* You're an awesome writer but, like I did with my first fanfic, you have to split your chapters into segments. *Eyes go large and start popping out of head* You write your chapter and build up an addrenaline rush, with some spelling errors here and there *steam starts shooting from ears, you hear a train hoot* And then...*she's gonna explode! RUN!* YOU LEAVE OFF *BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!*

*starts throwing a hissy fit at poor, defensless jeffy* and what's even worse is kagome is starting to sound ooc, I'm trying to picture ever saying stuff like that, *roots for sesshomaru throwing up Mr. Howle or whatever-his-name-was.

StartWritingStartWriting, continuecontinuecontinue! I'mgoingnutsojustwaitingforyoutofinishyourstoryinsteadofleavingoffallthedamntime! <---this actually says something btw, just tah geeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeevvve you a headache like you have given me when I read your story at 11 oclock at night. Yawn, night jeff

cya laterz, oh, my last commet that I was going to post up for your last chapter, my dad turned off the internet so you didn't get a chance to read it.

~unokitsune

P.S., why does your Thank You's always sound like this:

Thank you for the review

blah blah blah here (always sounds similar unless the reviewer said something that got your attention to right more than a paragraph =^~.-^= *teehee* wink)

~jeff

Jeffs must write more
Jeffs must write more

He must write more
He must write more

Otherwise we get a headache
And our heads explode
BOOM lookit, it's a song for you!

I love every part of this story it is so good. I would like to tell u something though since u r so good at going into detailnce nce you mentioned something like this in the story. Hunting dogs when they kkill something smaller then them they will threw their prey straight up into the air, witch causes the prey to be stunned and will either catch them or once they hit the ground they will shak the prey trying to break the neck. this is what most dogs will do. I wasn't sure if u knew that or not but its just a small bit of info if u wanted to use that or not.

ieeeeeee! does this mean he has children with there supposed other wives? and does he possible love them? does this mean kagome will have to share? GOOD CHAPPY!

The whole knot on the penis thing was amusing/interesting/different the first time I read it waay back in a story called "The Bath"...but now after it's been stolen by numerous would be lemon writers is boring, cliche and in poor taste.


Sesshoumaru and Kagome are horridly ooc. You've written Sesshoumaru as an idiot and Kagome as a tramp.. Then have the gall to have her insist over and over she's not a whore. I want my first kiss to be with Inuyasha...but I'll gladly screw you Sesshoumaru. *right*

For PWP this isn't bad. But, it could use some work. I know a woman's cycle is a part of life..but really do we have to hear about it?

whoooooo damn. Another good one! (It was spread over 3 chapters! oh my god! and that's exactly how many times I had to change!!! J/k) Oh I can't wait to read Kagome's reaction to being refered to as the third wife. ( I was hoping someone would write about him having a wife too) hehe hehe. As for your challenge, if no one else has went a head with it, Iup fup for it! As always looking forward to the next chapter.

~V~

Who could ask for a better ending to a tropical vacation, than to get home and have THREE "de ja vu"(only thank goodness without the castaways) chapters to read, sunburns and all, and two of them being full erotic ones! Many bows of admiration on your lemon! But, instead of changing my underwear, I have the urge to go out and sunbathe, "in private". How's that for a compliment? A question crossed my mind - couldn't Sessh have used his sword and put up a barrier to keep from being interupted? and at the same time wouldn't it also keep Gilligan away from the cube? Many thanks for your story jeffs!!!!

oooooooooooooh! das messed up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! he's freakin married!!!!!!!!! aaaaaaaaaahhh! shes gonna be maaaaaaaaaaadddd! lol lord ,t wat wait for the next chappy !!

uum, wouldn't the other women all confined in around the same space for a while experience the "roommate syndrome" where everyone's cycles align? unless they're dog demon wives in which case i'm not too sure about the biology of mythological creatures. :)

OMH jeff i can not wate to see Kagome's reaction to that bit of info. lol any way nice chap


Later

Naheta