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Okay, I can tell you're really trying with this fic. And honesty, it's a great idea, but as I'm trying to read it I keep envisioning a kindergarteacheacher: "See spot. See spot run. Run spot run." My biggest suggestion is to read this outloud to yourself, and realize how simple and repetitive your sentences are. If you're having a hard time with that, then find a beta reader who can fix those things up and maybe add some adjectives, compound sentences, complex sentences, simile, alliteration, ANYTHING to make this readable.
The only reason I'm reviewing this at all is because I like the idea, and the plot line, I just can't read it.

please update soon

hey, i've been reading all of your posted chapters and have to beg this of you: please *don't* let kagome get raped or molested by Sessh!!
i ask this for 3 reasons:
(1). i can't *stand* the Kag-Sessh pairing - especially if it involves rape. if Sessh has to be paired with anyone, Kagura or a grown up Rin make sense -that is if he *actually* does get paired with anyone - in the manga, he is way too cold and he sure as heck would not have friendly feelings that border on the sexual towards kagome;
(2). poor kagome has already been molested by boys in her village and raped by her own father! not to mention the fact that full youkai inuyasha also forced himself on her in order to make her his mate. please don't make the poor girl a sexual victim again...she's already suffered enough a heck of a lot of trauma when it comes to sex.
(3). i'm a hardcore inu-kag fan....i'm repeating myself here, but the idea of kag-sessh makes me feel queasy....

of course, *you* are the author and it's your right to do what you want...but i just wanted to give my input...

oh crap, so what happened next? i hope you update soon.

very sexy i loved it....and i dont know why but the kagome not being able to talk but ashaasha still excepts her makes the story even that much better keep up the amazing writing skills

love yah - Je Ne

what a sweet ending to the chapter. I loved it.

Umm...For starters, I think the subject of Inuyasha's Demonhood needs to come up more. The times when she notices his ears and the time he takes her to his cave would be good times for Kagome to worry about it. Also, I think Inuyasha is enough aware of how scared by demons humans are (even if he doesn't understand about the scared of men part; most teenage boys don't get it) to tell her right away that he's not palning to hurt her. There is also the subject of what she's wearing. I can totally picture wioy Ioy Inuysha burgaling a merchant's caravan for his prisoner.

i love this story please put up some more chapters i love it!!!!

KEEP GOING WITH THIS STORY

i loved it please please please please updaten...n...