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for Overwhelming Desire

by Lease242

person scarredbride
schedule December 7, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I like your story so far and hope it will continue for awhile longer. Even though you may not get many reviews, it all just comes down to: people are generally too lazy to review. What you should look at(from my author POV) is to continue the story for those who do review and are loyal readers, they are who matter. Who cares about the ones who remain quiet, if they enjoy it great, if not... then so be it. Hope to see more chapters out soon!
~scarredbride
person ugly
schedule December 2, 2003 at 12:00 AM
OMG! He has sex with her and still doesn't mark her! NooooO!!! But it seem like he really really really really really likes her! I would find it so so so so sad if he doesn't! Ooo I hope you continue with htis story, it's really good. lol Kagome's really good at seducing this sexy demon lord. lol, well hope you update soon! LOVE YOUR STORY! YOU ROCK!
person nightmareofcat
schedule December 2, 2003 at 12:00 AM
my goodness i loved it please update soon!!!
person Naheta
schedule December 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
nice job, i hope there is more to the story lol.

Naheta
person CM
schedule November 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Your a really good lemon writer! ^_~ Update soon!
person Rachel
schedule November 21, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good, but it's a little difficult to follow with the jumping around in perspective and position. Is Kagoma holding on to the branch or Sesshomaru's neck? Is she facing the tree, or does she have her leg around his hips? Is it written in first person or third person? Kagome's point of view? Sesshomaru's? In the opening paragraph, is it Kikyo who has come to terms with her feelings or Kagome?

These are things that are easily rectified, and doing so will change your story from "pretty good" to "very good" or even "excellent."

Keep trying - practice makes perfect!
person odile
schedule November 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
*fans self* gah...i think i feel over in my chair due to sensory overl *pr *presses hands to cheek* yup, not going
to be able to cool down for a while *big anime thumbs up* awesome!
person Seth
schedule November 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I'm loving this story more and more by the minute... Very well written chapter, I can't wait to see how she plans on getting close enough to him to actually try and seduce the great youkai...

Brilliant chapter,
Later...
person No One Knows
schedule November 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Awesome start! I can't wait to see more
person RekkaShinen
schedule November 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I can't wait to find out what happens next! This is definitely a good plot and I most definitely want to see how it develops. Ja ne! ^.~ v